My First Article With Real Thought

[craig96]

Hey all, I know some people like to copy other ideas and articles, which is fine but I am now trying to go down the road of totally new ideas.

I have just wrote the article: http://www.lovetoplaybingo.co.uk/bin...ed-as-gambling

Can you tell me what you think and please comment on the article itself. Give me a little self-esteem please. It would make me happy.

Thanks

[VIPCardClub]

Hi,

To start with there are a few spelling and grammatical errors. I've corrected these for you (bolded text below).

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In terms of the content itself, I think articles like this - where you are expressing a potentially controversial opinion - can be useful in encouraging debate. As you allow comments this type of article can hopefully attract comments from people that disagree with you - in turn you can then do a follow up article addressing those comments. I would, however, be more inclined to change some of the language to show that you are expressing an opinion, rather than portraying it as fact such as "Bingo is not gambling".

Hope this helps.

If you want me to remove the copy of your text above from this post, let me know once you've made a note of the corrections and I'll edit my post.

[MommyMachine]

I think this is well written, aside from some minor gramatical errors. It's unique, and it's nice to read something different every once in a while. I agree with the above post about presenting the opinion as fact, however; everything else looks great.

[craig96]

Hey, I have changed what you said and thanks very much, some were over looked on my behalf. can you pretty please delete the posts however because of duplicate content?

Thanks very much again.

No matter how many times I re-read stuff I still forget obvious things sometimes.

[craig96]

Hey,

I have just write another piece: http://www.lovetoplaybingo.co.uk/bin...men-play-bingo

Am I on the right track then people with the article ideas?